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 Post subject: Re: The JRPG Generator
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AaHHH this is SO COOL, SO COOL SO COOL
I appreciate the further naming of Gloriana because all the names in a proper JRPG have to be intense (hence the reason for stuff like Michelangelo etc.)

You know maybe it's just because I've reread it recently but the dynamic between the Lady and Michelangelo is reminding me of The Neverending Story's first part. I'm assuming you read it so I'm not explaining for potential spoilers for others, if not I'll tell you. Regardless the fact that you're reminding me of one of my favorite books is fantastic :D

I can't wait to read more!!!

NO THERE'S NO NEED OF A NEW TOPIC I'm super proud to showcase your stuff in here, you're not hijacking you're IMPROVING IT

I will totally make a page on the generator itself! I'll have to think of a cool way to show off the things :D


YAY I'm glad I'm not hijacking the thread XD

If you can believe it, I've watched The Neverending Story movie but have never read the book! I'm interested to hear about the dynamic and its parallels with my story :)

Also, YES lol I was trying to think about female names that would be just as intense and dramatic as Michelangelo, and "Gloriana" immediately popped to mind--it seems to fit well! (Yay for first instincts, right???)

I hope to be able to add more this weekend--I actually read the story bits aloud to my mom the other night and she absolutely loves it, too!

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 Post subject: Re: The JRPG Generator
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Oh my god go read the book like right now, the movie is...well...I could rant for the rest of my life about how the movie missed the point of the book, and the book is one of my top favorites ever, so I'll leave you with one hint: the dynamic between Atreyu and the Childlike Empress in the first part of the story.
That's all!

(One day I'll write a site about it, just you watch, it's been literally 20 years of thinking about this book arhghhhahhh)

I can't wait to see more from you! :D

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 Post subject: Re: The JRPG Generator
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Ooooooh okay! I will definitely have to check the book out now because the movie left me feeling like "...ehh??"

I've got an idea for the final battle scene which I might just go ahead and write out because omg it is going to be AMAZING and EMOTIONAL and sdkljksdjfksjdfk so cutscene, many drama, wow. :D

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 Post subject: Re: The JRPG Generator
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Well, I knew that even the author was displeased with the movie...and reading it recently, I absolutely understand why. If that had been my book, I would have been crying. We're talking removal and change of major plotpoints - into SUPER SKEEVY ONES, no less - and not even bothering to read the descriptions of what things look like. And we're not talking descriptions that you'd have to piece through the entire book - there's one case that comes to mind where the character is introduced and there's like a single phrase and NONE OF THAT IS RESPECTED. Not to mention that the movie ends halfway into the book...which is where the actual plot starts. D: It's terrible and horrible advertising for the book, even when I was a kid and I got the book because I watched the movie I was like "...this has nothing to do with the movie but it's 3000 times better and how did this happen???".

The JRPG Generator thread: Now With Critique of The Neverending Story
- which to be fair has a plot that is very related to the very concept of the JRPG Generator, so I can claim to not be completely off-topic -

OMG AMAZING AND EMOTIONAL I CAN'T WAIT

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/applauds all of what this thread has become.

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 Post subject: Re: The JRPG Generator
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The long-awaited day (or evening, depending on where you are) is here! This includes the final battle scene starting on page 11 (of 38 total pages...omg I sorta went crazy on this last scene xD). (I tried putting in a bookmark--the silly thing makes it open up to page 12 instead, but at least not as much back-scrolling required!)

If the above link doesn't load for you, try this link, and accept my many many apologies for the sheer amount of scrolling /o\)

I hope y'all like this! I definitely want to expand the story's middle bits out a lot further, but I also wanted to go ahead and write the final battle scene and the epilogue to kind of know where my story journey was "ending." (Plus this highly emotional, active scene was burning a hole in my gray matter demanding to be let out so... xD)

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 Post subject: Re: The JRPG Generator
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I haven't worked on this in about a month or so, 'cause I wanted to give everybody a chance to read if they wanted. Mainly I want to make sure the section I added in my last post makes sense, and to iron out any weirdness if it exists. What do y'all think?

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 Post subject: Re: The JRPG Generator
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I read it! Sorry that I took so long to get to it, but I read it at laaaast

It's so cool! You made everything make perfect sense and you got me into this story neck-deep, that's awesome. THE BARD! OMG

I enjoyed everything thoroughly and I was happy to read it and nothing was glaringly in need of revision, but, if you are looking for Intense Constructive Critique... The only thing I'd personally do is make the ending shorter and denser. That's my style though, it may not apply to what you want out of your writing of course. That's literally the only thing I can think anyway, and I don't even know if it would work in your case so overall

GOOD JOB WOW YEAHAHHHH

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dubiousdisc wrote:
I read it! Sorry that I took so long to get to it, but I read it at laaaast

It's so cool! You made everything make perfect sense and you got me into this story neck-deep, that's awesome. THE BARD! OMG

I enjoyed everything thoroughly and I was happy to read it and nothing was glaringly in need of revision, but, if you are looking for Intense Constructive Critique... The only thing I'd personally do is make the ending shorter and denser. That's my style though, it may not apply to what you want out of your writing of course. That's literally the only thing I can think anyway, and I don't even know if it would work in your case so overall

GOOD JOB WOW YEAHAHHHH


YAYAYYYY I'm glad you like it!! YAS the Bard turned out to be a super cool character, and I almost want to write a sequel (or prequel) exploring his role alongside the Lady as musical co-rulers.

I will say this ending scene was going to be about 3x shorter, but it kept getting more epic and escalating, and then I just ran with it...now I'm not sure what I would cut, if anything, because there's so much wrap-up that needs doing in the final scene. I might be able to cover some of the stuff in the bits I haven't written yet (like the other 11 cacophony scenes I've been too lazy to write yet xD). ^_^;

(Also, does the perspective-switching get too chaotic? I like to do that a lot in my fiction, to show events from multiple perspectives, but I might have gone a bit hog wild with it here LOL)

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 Post subject: Re: The JRPG Generator
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Nah I got you on the perspective-switching, it's fine XD

I meant, not in the sense of cut, just in the sense of tighten? Nothing to cut really, just maybe to consolidate where possible? Although I don't know, maybe it's not possible...

NEVERMIND ME ESSENTIALLY I'm just trying to find something to give input on and I guess it's not working agshdjkals

One of these days I really need to make the page of the things inspired by the generator! How would I put your story in it? Do I put a link to the Google Doc?

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